Faith
Criticized by: Mary Grace Sapungay
There was a girl named Yufa. She is a Christian. When she entered school, She met a guy named Roan who is a muslim. Roan is a funny person and this is the reason why they became friends even the fact that they both have different beliefs in life when it come to religion. Their companionship and friendship goes deeper. Roan always bring home Yufa using his motorcycle. After a few months, they became lovers. Their endearment is “mhine”
They both knew that their family will won’t agree with their relationship because of their religion. But their faith is strong that they believed there is only one God and their religions not a hindrance for them.
Few months later, they decided to live together without their parents permission.
They worked hard because they both knew that there will be a time that they
Would become parents and they don’t want their children to have a miserable life. They are also hoping that someday in the future, their parents can accept the both of them. After a couple of years, their wish came true. Their parents accepted Yufa and Roan’s relationship and because of that, they had decided to act married. There wedding ceremony was celebrated in both Christian and muslim way to respect each family culture. Sometime ,Yufa feels bothered because of the fact that muslim males are allowed to have more than one wife. She thinks, what if his husband will do the same thing. But Roan always comfort and assure her that he will be loyal to her until forever because he loved her so much. Yufa feels so happy and lucky to have Roan in her life and after sometime, they had their first baby.They named the baby ‘Jamirah’. Roan and Rufa were so happy because even there is a big conflict on there relationship, they still make it successful and happy.
The main character is Yuan. She is a girl who is a Christian that was in loved with a muslim guy. She was enrolled in a school where there she met Roan Yufa is a loving and caring person. Yufa always show love to Roan, she always show that she is strong even there is a conflict. She even fought for their relationship.
Roan is a muslim. He is a kind and funny person. He loved Yufa so much, that even they have different religion, he still show how much he love Yufa.
Yufa and Roan’s family are both religious. Because they know that their child is having a relationship with someone who has a different beliefs and culture from their religion so they didn’t agree on it. But because they love their children, at the end they accepted them.
The main characters in the story are Yufa and Roan. The dominant impression that they had created in the story were pure love caring and strong personality because at the end, they succeed their relationship. they made their relationship happy.
The conflict is both internal and external. External because at first, their family aren’t agree with their relationship. They are against with it. It is also an internal conflict because Yufa sometimes think what if Roan marries other women? it is because polygamy is accepted in their belief. Other characters like their family relate to the conflict by accepting the relationship of Roan and Yufa.
The conclusion resolved the conflict by the acceptance of the both parties.
The narrator is the author and was represented because the writer used “he” and “she” and she is cannot be seen into the character’s mind.- it is a limited third person.
The author chose this point of view maybe because she wanted to give the reader more information and she wanted the reader to feel the tone of the story.
I am happy with the story. Because it shows that love is really mysterious. If you are in love, you can actually do even impossible things. We are willing to fight for it is wrong and is different from your beliefs, principles in life and culture. Here in the story, it shows that even our religion will not be a hindrance for those people who are really in loved. Its just a matter of strong faith, and love in order for you to make the relationship last.
I can relate my life to the story because like Yufa, I was before in love with someone who has a different religion with mine. I so pity my self because I wasn’t able to fight for our love. I gave him up because I thought, God can give me more perfect guy than the one I’d loved. I broke up with him even the fact that I knew he will de hurt. I kept myself away from him and even tried to hate him, for me to forget everything about us. But at the end of the day, I was more hurt because I realized that I was just fooling myself. If only I fought for him, maybe I am already happy this time because I know that he will love me whatever and whoever I am. I might be also as happy as Yufa.
I rate the story 85% because we all know that a short story is a series of an imaginary events. Its most important aspects are character, plot, point of view and dialogue. The story doesn’t have a dialogue or a conversation between the characters in the story. The story was nice but because dialogue is lacking, I cant really feel and I cant give my sympathy to the characters. For me, it seems like a summary of the real story.
I wasn’t contented with the grammar of it because there are instances that the author uses small letters for the nouns Yufa and Roan. The same thing with the organization of ideas because the writer didn’t give more on how old the main characters are, where did it happen, as if the writer just summarized the the story. Although of course, I know that she is the one who made it. About the structure of sentences, I think the writer should not start a sentence by “and”. It is better that for example, in the sentences “and after a couple of years, they got married. “, “and one day, they decided to live together”. Its better to do this way, “after a couple of years,” “one day….”. the writer has only one paragraph.
I strongly suggest the writer to study the parts of a short story. It is important that a short story has the stages like exposition, which includes the characters and places, establishing a point of view and fills in background information. The opening incident which creates the conflict and gets the plot going. The rising action which presents the incidents or insights that intensifies the conflict. Fourth is the climax which raises the conflict to maximum intensity and the last is the conclusion which resolves the conflict. I also suggest the writer to always put a dialogue in writing a short story. Because dialogue in a short story gives an insight to the reader what is the personality of the character, and the background of the people who are speaking. By this, the readers can understand the characters’ attitudes and feelings. The writer should also use stylistic choices if she wants to emphasize ideas or express feelings in special or dramatic ways like using the figures of speech.
Criticized by: Mary Grace Sapungay
There was a girl named Yufa. She is a Christian. When she entered school, She met a guy named Roan who is a muslim. Roan is a funny person and this is the reason why they became friends even the fact that they both have different beliefs in life when it come to religion. Their companionship and friendship goes deeper. Roan always bring home Yufa using his motorcycle. After a few months, they became lovers. Their endearment is “mhine”
They both knew that their family will won’t agree with their relationship because of their religion. But their faith is strong that they believed there is only one God and their religions not a hindrance for them.
Few months later, they decided to live together without their parents permission.
They worked hard because they both knew that there will be a time that they
Would become parents and they don’t want their children to have a miserable life. They are also hoping that someday in the future, their parents can accept the both of them. After a couple of years, their wish came true. Their parents accepted Yufa and Roan’s relationship and because of that, they had decided to act married. There wedding ceremony was celebrated in both Christian and muslim way to respect each family culture. Sometime ,Yufa feels bothered because of the fact that muslim males are allowed to have more than one wife. She thinks, what if his husband will do the same thing. But Roan always comfort and assure her that he will be loyal to her until forever because he loved her so much. Yufa feels so happy and lucky to have Roan in her life and after sometime, they had their first baby.They named the baby ‘Jamirah’. Roan and Rufa were so happy because even there is a big conflict on there relationship, they still make it successful and happy.
The main character is Yuan. She is a girl who is a Christian that was in loved with a muslim guy. She was enrolled in a school where there she met Roan Yufa is a loving and caring person. Yufa always show love to Roan, she always show that she is strong even there is a conflict. She even fought for their relationship.
Roan is a muslim. He is a kind and funny person. He loved Yufa so much, that even they have different religion, he still show how much he love Yufa.
Yufa and Roan’s family are both religious. Because they know that their child is having a relationship with someone who has a different beliefs and culture from their religion so they didn’t agree on it. But because they love their children, at the end they accepted them.
The main characters in the story are Yufa and Roan. The dominant impression that they had created in the story were pure love caring and strong personality because at the end, they succeed their relationship. they made their relationship happy.
The conflict is both internal and external. External because at first, their family aren’t agree with their relationship. They are against with it. It is also an internal conflict because Yufa sometimes think what if Roan marries other women? it is because polygamy is accepted in their belief. Other characters like their family relate to the conflict by accepting the relationship of Roan and Yufa.
The conclusion resolved the conflict by the acceptance of the both parties.
The narrator is the author and was represented because the writer used “he” and “she” and she is cannot be seen into the character’s mind.- it is a limited third person.
The author chose this point of view maybe because she wanted to give the reader more information and she wanted the reader to feel the tone of the story.
I am happy with the story. Because it shows that love is really mysterious. If you are in love, you can actually do even impossible things. We are willing to fight for it is wrong and is different from your beliefs, principles in life and culture. Here in the story, it shows that even our religion will not be a hindrance for those people who are really in loved. Its just a matter of strong faith, and love in order for you to make the relationship last.
I can relate my life to the story because like Yufa, I was before in love with someone who has a different religion with mine. I so pity my self because I wasn’t able to fight for our love. I gave him up because I thought, God can give me more perfect guy than the one I’d loved. I broke up with him even the fact that I knew he will de hurt. I kept myself away from him and even tried to hate him, for me to forget everything about us. But at the end of the day, I was more hurt because I realized that I was just fooling myself. If only I fought for him, maybe I am already happy this time because I know that he will love me whatever and whoever I am. I might be also as happy as Yufa.
I rate the story 85% because we all know that a short story is a series of an imaginary events. Its most important aspects are character, plot, point of view and dialogue. The story doesn’t have a dialogue or a conversation between the characters in the story. The story was nice but because dialogue is lacking, I cant really feel and I cant give my sympathy to the characters. For me, it seems like a summary of the real story.
I wasn’t contented with the grammar of it because there are instances that the author uses small letters for the nouns Yufa and Roan. The same thing with the organization of ideas because the writer didn’t give more on how old the main characters are, where did it happen, as if the writer just summarized the the story. Although of course, I know that she is the one who made it. About the structure of sentences, I think the writer should not start a sentence by “and”. It is better that for example, in the sentences “and after a couple of years, they got married. “, “and one day, they decided to live together”. Its better to do this way, “after a couple of years,” “one day….”. the writer has only one paragraph.
I strongly suggest the writer to study the parts of a short story. It is important that a short story has the stages like exposition, which includes the characters and places, establishing a point of view and fills in background information. The opening incident which creates the conflict and gets the plot going. The rising action which presents the incidents or insights that intensifies the conflict. Fourth is the climax which raises the conflict to maximum intensity and the last is the conclusion which resolves the conflict. I also suggest the writer to always put a dialogue in writing a short story. Because dialogue in a short story gives an insight to the reader what is the personality of the character, and the background of the people who are speaking. By this, the readers can understand the characters’ attitudes and feelings. The writer should also use stylistic choices if she wants to emphasize ideas or express feelings in special or dramatic ways like using the figures of speech.